Cevahir
Cevahir is a really wonderful shopping centre. It is huge. Everybody loves shopping in Cevahir so it is quite crowded. There are a lot of shops, restaurant and beautiful girls in Cevahir. Cevahir is the biggest shopping centre in Europe. They have everything so you should really go Cevahir...
posted by ReCKLeSS at 1:57 PM
3 Comments:
Hi Cagri,
Nice 'look' to your blog! I'm a teacher in the USA -- your teacher Beyza asked me to have a look at your class's blogs.
Your description of Cevahir makes it sound very enticing (= exciting). Your description makes me want to go there some day myself.
Being an English teacher I can't resist the temptation to make some suggestions; I hope you'll forgive me. Have a look at the text below.
All the best. I look forward to reading your next post.
David
Cevahir is a really wonderful [REALLY A WONDERFUL] shopping centre. It is very [DON'T NEED 'VERY' -- HUGE IS ALREADY EXTREME] huge. Everybody absolutely [DON'T NEED ABSOLUTELY -- 'LOVES' IS ALREADY EXTREME. ALSO 'ABSOLUTELY LOVES' IS SPOKEN, NOT WRITTEN ENGLISH.]loves shopping in Cevahir so Cevahir [NOT 'CEVAHIR' BUT 'IT' - DON'T NEED TO REPEAT YOURSELF] is quite crowded. There are a lot of shops, restaurant [HOW MANY? JUST ONE??] and beautiful girls [AH, BEAUTIFUL GIRLS - MY FAVORITE!] in Cevahir. Cevahir is the biggest [BIGGEST WHAT?] in Europe. Everything is in this place [THEY HAVE EVERYTHING,] so you should really go to Cevahir...[DON'T NEED 'TO CEVAHIR'; IT'S UNDERSTOOD.]
Thank you so much for helping me. ;)
Keep blogging Çagrı.Do not lose your blogging spirit:)
Beyza
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